So, I'm new to this forum (as a poster, I've been lurking for some years) and for some time now I've been thinking on creating some characters. Not really to roleplay or anything, not even to play as them when the game is released, only as an exercise on character creation. And said that, I'm not that all convinced of my skills, so feel free to rip the poor Clos apart, but if you could do it in a constructive and civil way, I'd apreciate it. Suggestions are more than welcome, and I also have to say that I haven't still settled on one single idea, so maybe the character goes through some changes in the future. For now, enjoy and I'll be waiting for your words. Name: Alex Clos Sex: Male Place of birth: Quinton, Angeli, Croshaw System. Date of birth: May 19th 2909 Age: 38 Class/Status: Citizen. Obtained through distinguished military service. Under revision for suspicious activities on UEE’s space. Physical description: Ethnic/Race: Caucasian (Western mediterranean) Skin tone: Light tanned Hair color: Black Eyes color: Deep green Height: 1’86 m Weight: ~90 kg Constitution: Strong and huge, but still agile. Clos is a guy with a big body frame , tho not as well shaped as in the past, he still maintains a well balanced body. It's facial features are sharp and quite agressive looking, specially it's cheeks and jaw, hidden by a well trimmed black beard. in conjuction with his deep green eyes, his dense black eyebrows, the scars that cross his face, and his usual grin, make him look like a grim person. Also, during it's military career in the UEE Army, he's lost his left arm, now replaced with a prosthetic implant, both eardrums and has some more scars across his body, such as shrapnel in his left side, several gunshots across its body and one stabbing under his right clavicle. Background story: Born in Quinton, son of an important businessman and a UEE loyalist politician, had an easy and happy childhood living with his brother and sister. Since he was a child he was fascinated by the Navy and the massive battleships he sometimes saw crossing the Angeli skies, and together with his twin Dan, they dreamed of being the best fighter ace squadron in the whole galaxy. While they grew up, the relationship between the two brothers started to split ways and grow colder, while Alex developed an hyperprotective feeling for his newborn young brother, Rock. At the age of 15, at an Army show in Quinton, he fell in love with the gigantic metal beasts they used and the ground support ships, and the young and beautiful recruitement officer who was at the stand only helped him to solidify his conviction. At the age of 17, after a mediocre school life in opposition to his genius brother, he applied to an academic army formation as an engineering student, and exited it as a sergeant, assigned as an onboard mechanic and driver in an armored unit and sent to a border system in conflict, in a sort of peacekeeping force. One year later, due to some burocratic error, he was deployed as a foot soldier in the frontlines. When he turned 25, after around one year in his new role, he knew about the death of his mother, father and younger brother, aged 15, when a group of separatist activists blew up the Genesis where they were traveling from Terra back to Croshaw. This whole situation helped to break him. After that, he took a permit and started to have a more erratic behaviour, being more grim and closed in himself. At the same time, he inherited a third of the family fortune, but he wasn't the legal older son, so his twin Dan took the ownership of the family company once he finished his service in the Navy. Alex served until he was 29 in the Army, where he had thought he would stay until he retired after a life as a career soldier. But he was wrong. After several successful missions against pirates, rebels and some Vanduul, a Marine's recruiter came to him and offered him to join, to which he accepted. He then was trained as a nail jumper and deployed as a shock trooper. During his time in the Marine corp his body got badly injured several times, both in battle and in bar brawls, which brought some legal problems upon himself when he almost killed a guy with his bare hands and too much alcohol in his body. Thanks to some contacts in the Advocacy, though, he was kinda saved. His last mission was a total failiure. His squad was deployed from orbit close to a pirate fortress with the mission to create a beachead for the army to take control over the location, but due to climatic and lack of inteligence data, the nails landed in a hot mess. Even though most of the friendly troops died, in the end, the mission was completed. Alex, after loosing his arm, being scarred with shrapnel and some shotwounds, carrying the leftovers of his second in command's body, was about to let himself die in a trench, when he heard the reinforcements charging behind him. The only thing that he remembers is the strange feeling of happiness he felt while hearing the engines roar in the sky, behore blacking out. When he woke up, he was on a Hope class Endevour in route to a military hospital back in Saisei, without an arm and a tortured body. Feeling incapable of fighting again, he decided to retire and start a life as a citizen. When he exited the hospital, he lived for two years in Saisei with his younger sister, Aina, while he recovered from his emotional wounds. At the same time, he then started to enjoy the fortune he received ten years before. WIth the passing of time, the adventure spirit took pver him once more, and he decided to fund a new company with her sister, based in transport and security services, he went back to his childhood homeworld, and built there a house that would act as an operation base for his new adventures. In a selfish move, he made her sister carry the boring stuff of the company, and he started to take some risky jobs where the focus shifted. He was now more like a mercenary and a weapons dealer than a honorable businessman. Also, some information about the deaths of his parents and brother has reached his hands, so he has a new objective in life. So this is it... I think that it's kind of shitty, it's a rough translation and its 4 in the morning, I hope you understand. Anyway, I'll reserve the two next spots in case I decide to write the full description and now it's time for you to work. I'm waiting for your ideas! And don't be too cruel...